Monday 25 October 2010
Thursday 21 October 2010
Wednesday 20 October 2010
final script
SCENE 1
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.(Frank and Charlie look at each other
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
SCENE 2 -For Sale
EXT: Estate
Black title screen: DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads: "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted. The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car to Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them. They don’t. (Close up of the contents of their pockets: coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlie’s disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises it’s the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea.
He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, and then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
End.
SCENE 3 - Cookie sales
EXT: Estate
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'Brownies' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)They rustle the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Split screen of three doors. Each frame showing Frank and Charlie attempting to sell cookies and one after the other the door slams.
Fade to black
Charlie and Frank walk down the street tired and disappointed from their lack of sales. Frank turns to look at Charlie and sees him nibbling the cookie. Charlie offers Frank one. Frank gets annoyed and flicks him in the eye (flicking sound) and turns to walk aways. Charlie tries to follow him still blinded walks into a lamppost. Frank looks back. (Light bulb animation)
Charlie and Frank walk past the camera. Close up of Franks face.
Scene 4
EXT. Residential Estate
Title screen reads DAY 2: 11.51am
The camera zooms out from Franks face to reveal Charlie bandaged up for the Blind man scam.
(Sound of money pot)
Bucket reads ‘Help the blind boy’ cutaway to Empty Street (cricket sound)
Frankie and Charlie seem to have given up and Frank sees someone coming in the distance. Frank hits Charlie to get back into roll. As the man approaches Frank hold the bucket up to him but his attempt fails as the man just sniggers and walks past.
Frank and Charlie are annoyed at the mans gestures. Frank shouts back at the man. Charlie copies. The man stops turns and flinches at them whilst scowling. Frank and Charlie both jump back. As Charlie continues to act blind Frank watches where the man as he walks up to a car and exchanges packages at the car window. Frank squints and sees large wad of cash. Frank is shocked at large amount of money frank grabs Charlie and follows man. Frank and Charlie are well hidden as they follow the man around street corners and into a swanky hotel.
Arrive at room 28. Still well hidden they notice the man drop a package as he walks into a suite. Frank rushes to pick it up and opens it to find a bag of drugs inside; believing that this is what got the man his big wad of cash. (Light bulb animation) Frank gets his final idea. The door to the suite then opens behind Frank and the same man is standing there looking at the pair.
MAN: You two? You been followin’ me?!
FRANK: (nervously) na, na, na we’re here for the same reason you are…
MAN: You here to see Big Pete?
FRANK: Erm, yeah.
MAN: What you got?
Frank reveals the package he just picked up and the man looks inside, surprised that Frank has drugs.
FRANK: There’s plenty more where that came from.
MAN: Come back tomorrow and you better deliver. Try and scrub up a bit too yeah?
(Camera shows Franks appearance)
SCENE 5 (Replay of scene 1)
INT: Hotel corridor/room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
(Sound of ‘groovy’ 70s music) Frank and Charlie strut down the corridor in their new suits, Charlie holding the briefcase full of “goods” as Frank signals to let him do all the talking. The door opens and the man (bodyguard type) is standing there. Man laughs as he shakes his head at their outfits and the pair enters the room.
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: You got the stuff?(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: Yeah we got it (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Frank nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut. Suspicious glances are exchanged as they slowly slide the briefcases across the table to one another. As soon as Frank has hold of the briefcase full of money, he and Charlie open it celebrating and high fiving. Frank stops dead and darts a look at Big Pete, who has also opened his briefcase, and emptied the contents of a bag into his hand for a taste test. As Big Pete dips his Pinky finger in the “drugs” and raises it towards his mouth there is a FLASHBACK – Showing Frank and Charlie laughing and filling sandwich bags with flour and sugar (make clear to audience). The scene then snaps back to real time and Big Pete’s’ finger reaches his mouth. Frank panics. Close ups of Pete’s face as he tastes the flour (slow motion). Frank then has a shocked and worried expression, he gasps. The slow motion images stop and Frank blows the “drugs” in Big Pete’s face, grabs the money and scrambles out the room.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the door. (Triumphant music) As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in background wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs. Frank and Charlie manage to out run the bodyguard. In an act of celebration, they jump and high five each other. Images freezes, slowly fades to black and the credits roll. Images are then shown of them buying the car and being in it etc.
END
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.(Frank and Charlie look at each other
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
SCENE 2 -For Sale
EXT: Estate
Black title screen: DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads: "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted. The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car to Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them. They don’t. (Close up of the contents of their pockets: coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlie’s disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises it’s the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea.
He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, and then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
End.
SCENE 3 - Cookie sales
EXT: Estate
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'Brownies' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)They rustle the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Split screen of three doors. Each frame showing Frank and Charlie attempting to sell cookies and one after the other the door slams.
Fade to black
Charlie and Frank walk down the street tired and disappointed from their lack of sales. Frank turns to look at Charlie and sees him nibbling the cookie. Charlie offers Frank one. Frank gets annoyed and flicks him in the eye (flicking sound) and turns to walk aways. Charlie tries to follow him still blinded walks into a lamppost. Frank looks back. (Light bulb animation)
Charlie and Frank walk past the camera. Close up of Franks face.
Scene 4
EXT. Residential Estate
Title screen reads DAY 2: 11.51am
The camera zooms out from Franks face to reveal Charlie bandaged up for the Blind man scam.
(Sound of money pot)
Bucket reads ‘Help the blind boy’ cutaway to Empty Street (cricket sound)
Frankie and Charlie seem to have given up and Frank sees someone coming in the distance. Frank hits Charlie to get back into roll. As the man approaches Frank hold the bucket up to him but his attempt fails as the man just sniggers and walks past.
Frank and Charlie are annoyed at the mans gestures. Frank shouts back at the man. Charlie copies. The man stops turns and flinches at them whilst scowling. Frank and Charlie both jump back. As Charlie continues to act blind Frank watches where the man as he walks up to a car and exchanges packages at the car window. Frank squints and sees large wad of cash. Frank is shocked at large amount of money frank grabs Charlie and follows man. Frank and Charlie are well hidden as they follow the man around street corners and into a swanky hotel.
Arrive at room 28. Still well hidden they notice the man drop a package as he walks into a suite. Frank rushes to pick it up and opens it to find a bag of drugs inside; believing that this is what got the man his big wad of cash. (Light bulb animation) Frank gets his final idea. The door to the suite then opens behind Frank and the same man is standing there looking at the pair.
MAN: You two? You been followin’ me?!
FRANK: (nervously) na, na, na we’re here for the same reason you are…
MAN: You here to see Big Pete?
FRANK: Erm, yeah.
MAN: What you got?
Frank reveals the package he just picked up and the man looks inside, surprised that Frank has drugs.
FRANK: There’s plenty more where that came from.
MAN: Come back tomorrow and you better deliver. Try and scrub up a bit too yeah?
(Camera shows Franks appearance)
SCENE 5 (Replay of scene 1)
INT: Hotel corridor/room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
(Sound of ‘groovy’ 70s music) Frank and Charlie strut down the corridor in their new suits, Charlie holding the briefcase full of “goods” as Frank signals to let him do all the talking. The door opens and the man (bodyguard type) is standing there. Man laughs as he shakes his head at their outfits and the pair enters the room.
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: You got the stuff?(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: Yeah we got it (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Frank nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut. Suspicious glances are exchanged as they slowly slide the briefcases across the table to one another. As soon as Frank has hold of the briefcase full of money, he and Charlie open it celebrating and high fiving. Frank stops dead and darts a look at Big Pete, who has also opened his briefcase, and emptied the contents of a bag into his hand for a taste test. As Big Pete dips his Pinky finger in the “drugs” and raises it towards his mouth there is a FLASHBACK – Showing Frank and Charlie laughing and filling sandwich bags with flour and sugar (make clear to audience). The scene then snaps back to real time and Big Pete’s’ finger reaches his mouth. Frank panics. Close ups of Pete’s face as he tastes the flour (slow motion). Frank then has a shocked and worried expression, he gasps. The slow motion images stop and Frank blows the “drugs” in Big Pete’s face, grabs the money and scrambles out the room.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the door. (Triumphant music) As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in background wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs. Frank and Charlie manage to out run the bodyguard. In an act of celebration, they jump and high five each other. Images freezes, slowly fades to black and the credits roll. Images are then shown of them buying the car and being in it etc.
END
script 1
SCENE 1
INT: Poorly lit hotel room
Black screen reads DAY 3, 4:00pm
The scene opens with a birds eye view of two groups of people opposite each other with a table in the middle, and two breifcases in front of them. Frank is sitting on one side with Charlie standing behind him whilst "Big Pete", who is in fact a skinny, scrawny little man, is sitting opposite with a muscly male character behind him. Both Frank and Big Pete exchange unsure and suspicious glances. Big Pete then slightly opens his briefcase revealing a mass amount of cash inside. As Frank's eyes light up, Pete slams the case shut. In retatliation to this, Frank opens his case slightly to present what appears to be bags upon bags of crack cocaine. Big Pete doesn't hesitate to reach out for the goods and so Frank suddenly slams the suitcase shut too. A few more tense looks are given by the characters as the characters slide their briefcases across the table to initiate a switch. As soon as the case of money is in Franks hands there is a cut away of Frank and Charlie sprinting down a corridor, leaving Big Pete standing helplessly at the doorway shaking his fists at the pair. Triumphant music is played and there are numerous two shots of the pair comically running away. Frank trying to hold on to his hat and the briefcase whilst Charlie is just trying to not fall over! They both look at each other, still running, and laugh at what the have just achieved.
A black screen then reads DAY 1: 11:08am
SCENE 2
EXT: Street in Estate in which they live
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street hands in their pockets kicking a can and wasting time as usual. When suddenly Frank spots a "FOR SALE" sign on a car window that he likes the look of. He goes towards it to get a better look and we see a close up of the sign selling the car for £6000. He ponders the idea of how to get money whilst rubbing his chin imagining how good it would be to have this car and finally have something to do with his days! Meanwhile, Charlie is uninterested and just looking at the car because Frank is. out of no where, Charlie pulls out a cookie and there is a slow motion extreme close up of him taking a bite. Like lightning, Frank is hit with, what he deems to be, a flawless idea! Clicking his fingers and expressing his excitement to Charlie he jumps around and points to the cookie as if the plan should be obvious! Frank runs off screen to put his plan into action whilst Charlie, still very confused, carries on eating his cookie. Frank walks back into the shot and as he drags Charlie out a black out comes in from the side.
SCENE 3
EXT: Street in Estate they live
"DING DONG!!" (sound of doorbell)
A door opens to find Frank and Charlie standing there wearing banners reading "cookies" and they are holding a box each. Frank holds out his hand (implying payment) as Charlie thrusts the box of cookies at the camera (act as a customer - point of view shot) The camera/ customer shakes his head and shuts the door. Another doorbell sounds and the same thing happens again in a different house. A third doorbell rings and this time when they answer the door, Frank and Charlie are on their knees begging for just one box of cookies to be bought, but the customer just doesn't want to know. The pleading expression on Charlie's face becomes even more desperate as he stands up and takes a step closer to the camera. This threatens the customer and he punches Charlie in the face. Once again Frank is struck by a brilliant idea (as this one failed) and as he clicks his fingers a black screen ends the scene.
SCENE 3
EXT: A street in the area they live
The scene opens with a black screen fade, revealing Charlie, bandaged round his eyes and clutching at a (help the blind) box. Frank is with him and almost like a trader of a market stall, trying to pull in punters to give them money. Long shots are then taken of the surrounding road and it is clear that there is no one around so they sit down. All of a sudden, a young man aged 20 or 30 comes along and Frank is instantly up and begging for cash for his poor friend. Charlie gets up with his arms out stretched as if he cannot see the young man, blindly suggesting he put money in the box. The man pulls up his hood and continues to walk. Charlie then throws the box on the floor, pulls down his bandage and shakes his fist at the unknown man. Frank immediately nudges him, insisting he puts the bandage back over his eyes and he shuffles quickly to do it. When he does he begins to walk with his hands out as if he really is blind. Whilst Charlie is walking around like that, Frank observes the man that they had just encountered. He crossed the road and is now talking into the window of a car. Frank clicks his fingers and the scene fades to black.
SCENE 4 (SCENE 1 again but now in order of the story, SCENE 4)
INT: Poorly lit hotel room
The scene opens with a birds eye view of two groups of people opposite each other with a table in the middle, and two breifcases in front of them. Frank is sitting on one side with Charlie standing behind him whilst "Big Pete", who is in fact a skinny, scrawny little man, is sitting opposite with a muscly male character behind him. Both Frank and Big Pete exchange unsure and suspicious glances. Big Pete then slightly opens his briefcase revealing a mass amount of cash inside. As Frank's eyes light up, Pete slams the case shut. In retatliation to this, Frank opens his case slightly to present what appears to be bags upon bags of crack cocaine. Big Pete doesn't hesitate to reach out for the goods and so Frank suddenly slams the suitcase shut too. A few more tense looks are given by the characters as the characters slide their briefcases across the table to initiate a switch. Frank opens the case fully and he is laughing and high fiving Charlie as they finally have the money needed for the car. Big Pete opens his case fully and with a smug smile takes out on of the bags. Frank and Charlie freeze as they watch Pete's actions closely. Slowly, Pete opens a bag and empties some of the contents into his hand... there is then a cut away to Frank losening his colar of his shirt and he gulps (sound of gulp). Pete licks the tip of his pinky finger and dabs it into the powder. As this happens, a black and white flashback is shown of Frank and Charlie laughing their heads off, filling plastic sandwich bags of flour. Then back to real time (slow motion) Pete tastes the powder on his finger. The film then goes back into normal paced filming and Frank aggressively blows the powder into Pete's face; blinding him temporarily. Frank and Charlie make a dash for the door and we then see the pair running out from the outside. Triumphant music is played and there are numerous two shots of the pair comically running away. Frank trying to hold on to his hat and the briefcase whilst Charlie is just trying to not fall over! They both look at each other, still running, and laugh at what the have just achieved. The scene 9and film) end with a freeze frame of them running and laughing at each other.
ROLL CREDITS
As the credits are being shown there are numerous pictures of them with the car they bought.
INT: Poorly lit hotel room
Black screen reads DAY 3, 4:00pm
The scene opens with a birds eye view of two groups of people opposite each other with a table in the middle, and two breifcases in front of them. Frank is sitting on one side with Charlie standing behind him whilst "Big Pete", who is in fact a skinny, scrawny little man, is sitting opposite with a muscly male character behind him. Both Frank and Big Pete exchange unsure and suspicious glances. Big Pete then slightly opens his briefcase revealing a mass amount of cash inside. As Frank's eyes light up, Pete slams the case shut. In retatliation to this, Frank opens his case slightly to present what appears to be bags upon bags of crack cocaine. Big Pete doesn't hesitate to reach out for the goods and so Frank suddenly slams the suitcase shut too. A few more tense looks are given by the characters as the characters slide their briefcases across the table to initiate a switch. As soon as the case of money is in Franks hands there is a cut away of Frank and Charlie sprinting down a corridor, leaving Big Pete standing helplessly at the doorway shaking his fists at the pair. Triumphant music is played and there are numerous two shots of the pair comically running away. Frank trying to hold on to his hat and the briefcase whilst Charlie is just trying to not fall over! They both look at each other, still running, and laugh at what the have just achieved.
A black screen then reads DAY 1: 11:08am
SCENE 2
EXT: Street in Estate in which they live
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street hands in their pockets kicking a can and wasting time as usual. When suddenly Frank spots a "FOR SALE" sign on a car window that he likes the look of. He goes towards it to get a better look and we see a close up of the sign selling the car for £6000. He ponders the idea of how to get money whilst rubbing his chin imagining how good it would be to have this car and finally have something to do with his days! Meanwhile, Charlie is uninterested and just looking at the car because Frank is. out of no where, Charlie pulls out a cookie and there is a slow motion extreme close up of him taking a bite. Like lightning, Frank is hit with, what he deems to be, a flawless idea! Clicking his fingers and expressing his excitement to Charlie he jumps around and points to the cookie as if the plan should be obvious! Frank runs off screen to put his plan into action whilst Charlie, still very confused, carries on eating his cookie. Frank walks back into the shot and as he drags Charlie out a black out comes in from the side.
SCENE 3
EXT: Street in Estate they live
"DING DONG!!" (sound of doorbell)
A door opens to find Frank and Charlie standing there wearing banners reading "cookies" and they are holding a box each. Frank holds out his hand (implying payment) as Charlie thrusts the box of cookies at the camera (act as a customer - point of view shot) The camera/ customer shakes his head and shuts the door. Another doorbell sounds and the same thing happens again in a different house. A third doorbell rings and this time when they answer the door, Frank and Charlie are on their knees begging for just one box of cookies to be bought, but the customer just doesn't want to know. The pleading expression on Charlie's face becomes even more desperate as he stands up and takes a step closer to the camera. This threatens the customer and he punches Charlie in the face. Once again Frank is struck by a brilliant idea (as this one failed) and as he clicks his fingers a black screen ends the scene.
SCENE 3
EXT: A street in the area they live
The scene opens with a black screen fade, revealing Charlie, bandaged round his eyes and clutching at a (help the blind) box. Frank is with him and almost like a trader of a market stall, trying to pull in punters to give them money. Long shots are then taken of the surrounding road and it is clear that there is no one around so they sit down. All of a sudden, a young man aged 20 or 30 comes along and Frank is instantly up and begging for cash for his poor friend. Charlie gets up with his arms out stretched as if he cannot see the young man, blindly suggesting he put money in the box. The man pulls up his hood and continues to walk. Charlie then throws the box on the floor, pulls down his bandage and shakes his fist at the unknown man. Frank immediately nudges him, insisting he puts the bandage back over his eyes and he shuffles quickly to do it. When he does he begins to walk with his hands out as if he really is blind. Whilst Charlie is walking around like that, Frank observes the man that they had just encountered. He crossed the road and is now talking into the window of a car. Frank clicks his fingers and the scene fades to black.
SCENE 4 (SCENE 1 again but now in order of the story, SCENE 4)
INT: Poorly lit hotel room
The scene opens with a birds eye view of two groups of people opposite each other with a table in the middle, and two breifcases in front of them. Frank is sitting on one side with Charlie standing behind him whilst "Big Pete", who is in fact a skinny, scrawny little man, is sitting opposite with a muscly male character behind him. Both Frank and Big Pete exchange unsure and suspicious glances. Big Pete then slightly opens his briefcase revealing a mass amount of cash inside. As Frank's eyes light up, Pete slams the case shut. In retatliation to this, Frank opens his case slightly to present what appears to be bags upon bags of crack cocaine. Big Pete doesn't hesitate to reach out for the goods and so Frank suddenly slams the suitcase shut too. A few more tense looks are given by the characters as the characters slide their briefcases across the table to initiate a switch. Frank opens the case fully and he is laughing and high fiving Charlie as they finally have the money needed for the car. Big Pete opens his case fully and with a smug smile takes out on of the bags. Frank and Charlie freeze as they watch Pete's actions closely. Slowly, Pete opens a bag and empties some of the contents into his hand... there is then a cut away to Frank losening his colar of his shirt and he gulps (sound of gulp). Pete licks the tip of his pinky finger and dabs it into the powder. As this happens, a black and white flashback is shown of Frank and Charlie laughing their heads off, filling plastic sandwich bags of flour. Then back to real time (slow motion) Pete tastes the powder on his finger. The film then goes back into normal paced filming and Frank aggressively blows the powder into Pete's face; blinding him temporarily. Frank and Charlie make a dash for the door and we then see the pair running out from the outside. Triumphant music is played and there are numerous two shots of the pair comically running away. Frank trying to hold on to his hat and the briefcase whilst Charlie is just trying to not fall over! They both look at each other, still running, and laugh at what the have just achieved. The scene 9and film) end with a freeze frame of them running and laughing at each other.
ROLL CREDITS
As the credits are being shown there are numerous pictures of them with the car they bought.
Sunday 17 October 2010
character profile (charlie)
CHARLIE
Age: 21 but not the average 21 year old. He doesn't have a job, enjoys being a "bum" and has no aspirations for the future.
Main Trait: Probably one of the dumbest people you will ever meet without being classed as retarded. Forever following Franks' word he is an easy going idiot.
Humanizing Trait: Although Charlie is too stupid for words, he is a really loyal friend to Frank and will do anything for their friendship! Even if it means dabbling in a fake drug deal...
Profession: no qualifications, not even GCSEs - he was kicked out of school at the age of 14 due to lack of committment and attendance. When he wasn't being lazy and made the effort to go into school, he was sent home for disrupting the class and being a clown. Eventually, they just kicked him out.
Address: he has lived opposite Frank his entire life and they both live on a rundown estate. However, coming from a stable home with both parents there.
Values: Charlie enjoys playing car racing video games, eating cookies that his mum STILL cooks him and being with Frank, his best friend. He's not the sort of person to give to a needy person on the street, but not because he's rude, because he's way too stupid and broke to! He doesn't drive (yet) but enjoys pretending to drive on his games.
Foil: Charlie works at the same pace as his best friend Frank throughout the film. The main difference is that Charlie is way too dumb to think of the "cunning schemes" that Frank does. Although, as the film progresses both cahracters grow to rip off a "big time" drug dealer.
Obsession: Where Charlie is a comedic character his obsession is more of a great fondness; for video games and eating. Rather than having a dark obsession his is funny. This is because the word "obsession" is usually associated with negative and sinister actions because a character likes something/someone too much.
Goal: His goal is to get money for a car. However, he is more the puppy dog following Frank with his ideas. He's more in it for the adventure.
Idol: Charlie's idol is Frank. He respects and looks up to him like an older brother even though they're not related.
Epitaph: "aint gotta be a smarty pants to make moneys!"
Internal conflicts: The child inside Charlie is constantly alive however the actions he takes out begin to mature throughout the film. He is initially a child in a 21 year olds' body because his daily routine follows that of a young boy. e.g. playing video games, hanging around with his best friend and not worrying about the responsibilities every other 21 year old should have. So, his inner child does conflict with how he SHOULD be but both outer and inner personalities are connected.
Interpersonal conflicts: Without Charlie, the film would only be half as funny as it could be as we wouldn't have a croud favourite double act. Frank would pursue the schemes on his own and it's not funny when one person fails a stupid idea! Charlie's role in the film is vital, as is Franks; you cant have one without the other!
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: he has no money, he has no will power to find a job to make money, he has no conflict with society as he chooses to be this way. He doesn't blame society for him being lazy as he is happy to be this way.
Best thing that could happen to this character (could turn out to be the worst): Him and Frank get the money they need for the car HOWEVER this could turn out to be a bad thing as the only knowledge Charlie has of driving is in his video games!!
Worst thing that could happen to that character ( could turn out to be the best): If he lost his best friend Frank. He would be lonely and heartbroken, like a child losing their favourite toy!
Why the audience would root for this character: Mainly because he's funny but more because he's so stupid! Additionally, his and Frank's duo scams in order to get money will make the audience want them to suceed. Charlie is a really likeable character.
Voice (a despcription of the inticing incident that kicks up the drama, from the viewpoint of the character): "we... we gotta get the moneys to get the car cos then we wont 'aff to walk anymore. that would be well good!"
Age: 21 but not the average 21 year old. He doesn't have a job, enjoys being a "bum" and has no aspirations for the future.
Main Trait: Probably one of the dumbest people you will ever meet without being classed as retarded. Forever following Franks' word he is an easy going idiot.
Humanizing Trait: Although Charlie is too stupid for words, he is a really loyal friend to Frank and will do anything for their friendship! Even if it means dabbling in a fake drug deal...
Profession: no qualifications, not even GCSEs - he was kicked out of school at the age of 14 due to lack of committment and attendance. When he wasn't being lazy and made the effort to go into school, he was sent home for disrupting the class and being a clown. Eventually, they just kicked him out.
Address: he has lived opposite Frank his entire life and they both live on a rundown estate. However, coming from a stable home with both parents there.
Values: Charlie enjoys playing car racing video games, eating cookies that his mum STILL cooks him and being with Frank, his best friend. He's not the sort of person to give to a needy person on the street, but not because he's rude, because he's way too stupid and broke to! He doesn't drive (yet) but enjoys pretending to drive on his games.
Foil: Charlie works at the same pace as his best friend Frank throughout the film. The main difference is that Charlie is way too dumb to think of the "cunning schemes" that Frank does. Although, as the film progresses both cahracters grow to rip off a "big time" drug dealer.
Obsession: Where Charlie is a comedic character his obsession is more of a great fondness; for video games and eating. Rather than having a dark obsession his is funny. This is because the word "obsession" is usually associated with negative and sinister actions because a character likes something/someone too much.
Goal: His goal is to get money for a car. However, he is more the puppy dog following Frank with his ideas. He's more in it for the adventure.
Idol: Charlie's idol is Frank. He respects and looks up to him like an older brother even though they're not related.
Epitaph: "aint gotta be a smarty pants to make moneys!"
Internal conflicts: The child inside Charlie is constantly alive however the actions he takes out begin to mature throughout the film. He is initially a child in a 21 year olds' body because his daily routine follows that of a young boy. e.g. playing video games, hanging around with his best friend and not worrying about the responsibilities every other 21 year old should have. So, his inner child does conflict with how he SHOULD be but both outer and inner personalities are connected.
Interpersonal conflicts: Without Charlie, the film would only be half as funny as it could be as we wouldn't have a croud favourite double act. Frank would pursue the schemes on his own and it's not funny when one person fails a stupid idea! Charlie's role in the film is vital, as is Franks; you cant have one without the other!
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: he has no money, he has no will power to find a job to make money, he has no conflict with society as he chooses to be this way. He doesn't blame society for him being lazy as he is happy to be this way.
Best thing that could happen to this character (could turn out to be the worst): Him and Frank get the money they need for the car HOWEVER this could turn out to be a bad thing as the only knowledge Charlie has of driving is in his video games!!
Worst thing that could happen to that character ( could turn out to be the best): If he lost his best friend Frank. He would be lonely and heartbroken, like a child losing their favourite toy!
Why the audience would root for this character: Mainly because he's funny but more because he's so stupid! Additionally, his and Frank's duo scams in order to get money will make the audience want them to suceed. Charlie is a really likeable character.
Voice (a despcription of the inticing incident that kicks up the drama, from the viewpoint of the character): "we... we gotta get the moneys to get the car cos then we wont 'aff to walk anymore. that would be well good!"
character profile (frank)
FRANK
Age: 26 Very immature, jobless with no motivation to find work although very stupid he believes that he is intelligent so he refuses to be told he is wrong, particularity by Charlie.
Main Trait: Brains of the 'program' . Although they are not very intelligent charecters Frank is the smater to the stupid twosome, I guess you could he is the blind that is leading the blind.
Humanizing Trait: Despite being ridiculously stupid and seemingly immune from emotions, he is very loyal to Charlie and will do anything to protect him.
Profession: Left School at 16, failed every exam so had no qualifications to get into college or sixth form.
Address: He has lived opposite Charlie his whole life in an East End dingy estate. (Working class enviroment).However, he has come from a stable home brought up by his Dad.
Values: A very lazy charecter that wants to climb the status ladder but without the hard grafting it involves.He will look for the easy way out of anything, he the type to not want to run but would walk fast. He sits around the house as his Dad is rarely ever at home as doesnt take an interest in what Frank gets up to.
Foil: Frank comes up with all the cunning ideas for the schemes but always wants Charlie by his side taking part in these cunning schemes. Their plans aren't quite the same with just one of them partaking in it.
Obsession: Frank is obsessed with finding the easy way out of everything! If it involves hard work, Frank ain't involved.
Goal: To get the £6000 and more in order to buy this car that he sees for sale. He likes the idea of Charlie looking up to him so he feels if his plans are successful Charlie's respect for him will continue to grow
Idol: Frank sees himself as his own idol because in his eyes he feels he can do no wrong. Put it this way, Frank is too lazy to aspire to be like any one else.
Epitaph: ''If its my idea, its a great idea!''
Internal Conflicts: Frank is full of ideas but is very impractical, he doesn't understand the error of his ways until he realises his ideas don't work.He doesn't like to be told he is wrong so the boys have to fail at a task before they realise it was a bad idea, so Frank's inability to see his errors and not think practically plays a part in the film.
Interpersonal Conflicts:Frank is not quite Frank without Charlie as Frank does not feel as adequate without Charlie looking up to him. Frank and Charlie are a double act and without each other the film creates less of an impact on the audience.
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: He has no job aspirations, no money and no qualifications, he lives in his own little bubble which Charlie finds himself in. Despite all this he is still a very happy character as he believes in his eyes he is doing no wrong.
Best Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character (could turn out to be the worst): Alongside Charlie he finally gets the money for the car, but with no regular income who knows how long they will be able to keep the car for, as insurance and road tax are just some of the expenses that come with having a car. !
Worst Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character: Loosing Charlie. Charlie's presence fuels him to be the ideas person he is in the film and without Charlie egging him on Frank is not quite the same.
Why The Audience Will Root For This Character: Because he hasn't got a mean bone in his body and it will become apparent how much he feeds off of Charlie's energy. Charlie is a loveable character and anyone who loves Charlie will love Frank.
Voice:'' Walking is for LOSERS! I'm so loser, so LETS DRIVE!''
Age: 26 Very immature, jobless with no motivation to find work although very stupid he believes that he is intelligent so he refuses to be told he is wrong, particularity by Charlie.
Main Trait: Brains of the 'program' . Although they are not very intelligent charecters Frank is the smater to the stupid twosome, I guess you could he is the blind that is leading the blind.
Humanizing Trait: Despite being ridiculously stupid and seemingly immune from emotions, he is very loyal to Charlie and will do anything to protect him.
Profession: Left School at 16, failed every exam so had no qualifications to get into college or sixth form.
Address: He has lived opposite Charlie his whole life in an East End dingy estate. (Working class enviroment).However, he has come from a stable home brought up by his Dad.
Values: A very lazy charecter that wants to climb the status ladder but without the hard grafting it involves.He will look for the easy way out of anything, he the type to not want to run but would walk fast. He sits around the house as his Dad is rarely ever at home as doesnt take an interest in what Frank gets up to.
Foil: Frank comes up with all the cunning ideas for the schemes but always wants Charlie by his side taking part in these cunning schemes. Their plans aren't quite the same with just one of them partaking in it.
Obsession: Frank is obsessed with finding the easy way out of everything! If it involves hard work, Frank ain't involved.
Goal: To get the £6000 and more in order to buy this car that he sees for sale. He likes the idea of Charlie looking up to him so he feels if his plans are successful Charlie's respect for him will continue to grow
Idol: Frank sees himself as his own idol because in his eyes he feels he can do no wrong. Put it this way, Frank is too lazy to aspire to be like any one else.
Epitaph: ''If its my idea, its a great idea!''
Internal Conflicts: Frank is full of ideas but is very impractical, he doesn't understand the error of his ways until he realises his ideas don't work.He doesn't like to be told he is wrong so the boys have to fail at a task before they realise it was a bad idea, so Frank's inability to see his errors and not think practically plays a part in the film.
Interpersonal Conflicts:Frank is not quite Frank without Charlie as Frank does not feel as adequate without Charlie looking up to him. Frank and Charlie are a double act and without each other the film creates less of an impact on the audience.
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: He has no job aspirations, no money and no qualifications, he lives in his own little bubble which Charlie finds himself in. Despite all this he is still a very happy character as he believes in his eyes he is doing no wrong.
Best Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character (could turn out to be the worst): Alongside Charlie he finally gets the money for the car, but with no regular income who knows how long they will be able to keep the car for, as insurance and road tax are just some of the expenses that come with having a car. !
Worst Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character: Loosing Charlie. Charlie's presence fuels him to be the ideas person he is in the film and without Charlie egging him on Frank is not quite the same.
Why The Audience Will Root For This Character: Because he hasn't got a mean bone in his body and it will become apparent how much he feeds off of Charlie's energy. Charlie is a loveable character and anyone who loves Charlie will love Frank.
Voice:'' Walking is for LOSERS! I'm so loser, so LETS DRIVE!''
Wednesday 13 October 2010
feedback on switch
- Really simple idea - easy to understand and simple yet effective.
- Like the idea of starting with the end and explaining how the characters ended up in their situation.
- Really like the idea of a comic duo/double act theme.
- punch in the face is a bit abrubt and out of the blue but if really exaggerated can work well in the world of your film.
- Exaggerated - slapstick comedy would have to be incorporated.
- over the top actions and expressions - rely a lot on characters!
- if it's a comedy it doesn't matter as much on the thematic unity and sticking to a running theme as the theme is the slapstick that MUST be present throughout!
After receiving this feedback, as a group, we decided there wasn't any vital elements of the treatment that we needed to change it was more considerations we need to take when casting and finding the locations to make this film work successfully.
- Like the idea of starting with the end and explaining how the characters ended up in their situation.
- Really like the idea of a comic duo/double act theme.
- punch in the face is a bit abrubt and out of the blue but if really exaggerated can work well in the world of your film.
- Exaggerated - slapstick comedy would have to be incorporated.
- over the top actions and expressions - rely a lot on characters!
- if it's a comedy it doesn't matter as much on the thematic unity and sticking to a running theme as the theme is the slapstick that MUST be present throughout!
After receiving this feedback, as a group, we decided there wasn't any vital elements of the treatment that we needed to change it was more considerations we need to take when casting and finding the locations to make this film work successfully.
treatment (switch)
Title: SWITCH
Tagline: How far will you go for a bit of cash?
Pitch: 20 year old Charlie and 26 year old Frank are desperate for cash after seeing a car they want for sale at a hefty £6000. Not bieng the brightest bulbs they take out quick money making schemes that fail; one after the other. Until they resort to 'The Switch'.
Treatment: The film opens on Day 3 of the SWITCH with the pair running for their lives down a corridor (angry looking gangsters in the background). Then flashing back to Day 1 we see their initial reason for their thirst for cash as the two see a car for sale that they really want. Needing to gather £6000 fast and dealing with unemployment and a lack of qualifications they soon realise they have a problem.
Standing there pondering their options, Charlie pulls out a half eaten cookie from his pocket and Frank is instantly hit by an ingenious idea. (lightbulb animation) Selling cookies!
Frank feels that selling cookies will earn them a lot of quick cash and so they go door to door attempting to sell them. However, door after door the customers are not interested and Charlie gets punched in the eye by the last potential customer! (montage of doors slamming, point of view shots from door)
Seeing Charlie clucth at his eye in pain, Frank is inspire to stage a fake charity (lightbulb animation) conning money out of people who think they are helping 'blind' Charlie. Frank grabs the attention of the only man walking down the street whilst Charlie shakes his money pot at him. However, the man is not the slightest bit interested and flashes a dirty look whilst putting his hood up. Charlie, forgetting momentarily that he is blind, shakes his fist at the passer by and Frank hits him to encourage him to stay in role. As they watch the man walk away they hear a screeching sound of a car apporaching and see it pull up next to the man they encountered. They see what SEEMS to be an inappropriate drug deal and this is where Frank is hit by his best idea yet - The Switch. Frank is convinced that if they cut a slice of a drug deal they will have more than enough money to buy the car. So they go home and gather together a bundle of drugs. Flour and sugar. Believing that this is a sure in way to make some cash, they fix themselves up to look the part (switching costumes) and go to meet 'Big Pete' the hardest gangster on the estate.
The meeting place and time is sorted and the two find themselves in a hotel room across the table from Big Pete who is willing to give them the money they need in exchange for the 'drugs'. The deal goes well, until Big Pete does a taste test and finds that the drugs taste a little sweeter than they should and their cover is blown. Frank literally blows the 'drug' in Big Pete's face and the two make a run for it. Running for their lives they get free and the film ends with both Frank and Charlie high fiving each other with the breifcase full of money in sight.
Credits roll with numerous pictures of the double act in their new car.
Tagline: How far will you go for a bit of cash?
Pitch: 20 year old Charlie and 26 year old Frank are desperate for cash after seeing a car they want for sale at a hefty £6000. Not bieng the brightest bulbs they take out quick money making schemes that fail; one after the other. Until they resort to 'The Switch'.
Treatment: The film opens on Day 3 of the SWITCH with the pair running for their lives down a corridor (angry looking gangsters in the background). Then flashing back to Day 1 we see their initial reason for their thirst for cash as the two see a car for sale that they really want. Needing to gather £6000 fast and dealing with unemployment and a lack of qualifications they soon realise they have a problem.
Standing there pondering their options, Charlie pulls out a half eaten cookie from his pocket and Frank is instantly hit by an ingenious idea. (lightbulb animation) Selling cookies!
Frank feels that selling cookies will earn them a lot of quick cash and so they go door to door attempting to sell them. However, door after door the customers are not interested and Charlie gets punched in the eye by the last potential customer! (montage of doors slamming, point of view shots from door)
Seeing Charlie clucth at his eye in pain, Frank is inspire to stage a fake charity (lightbulb animation) conning money out of people who think they are helping 'blind' Charlie. Frank grabs the attention of the only man walking down the street whilst Charlie shakes his money pot at him. However, the man is not the slightest bit interested and flashes a dirty look whilst putting his hood up. Charlie, forgetting momentarily that he is blind, shakes his fist at the passer by and Frank hits him to encourage him to stay in role. As they watch the man walk away they hear a screeching sound of a car apporaching and see it pull up next to the man they encountered. They see what SEEMS to be an inappropriate drug deal and this is where Frank is hit by his best idea yet - The Switch. Frank is convinced that if they cut a slice of a drug deal they will have more than enough money to buy the car. So they go home and gather together a bundle of drugs. Flour and sugar. Believing that this is a sure in way to make some cash, they fix themselves up to look the part (switching costumes) and go to meet 'Big Pete' the hardest gangster on the estate.
The meeting place and time is sorted and the two find themselves in a hotel room across the table from Big Pete who is willing to give them the money they need in exchange for the 'drugs'. The deal goes well, until Big Pete does a taste test and finds that the drugs taste a little sweeter than they should and their cover is blown. Frank literally blows the 'drug' in Big Pete's face and the two make a run for it. Running for their lives they get free and the film ends with both Frank and Charlie high fiving each other with the breifcase full of money in sight.
Credits roll with numerous pictures of the double act in their new car.
Tuesday 12 October 2010
Feedback (Heist)
Feedback after new story idea
Miss Nair explain how there was too many character and we would need to think about how long it would take to film all of them; as adding a lot of character in a short film could complicate things. It could be very difficult to try to organise all the characters.
The story needs to have a lot of thinking behind it… about the location and timing with the characters. The organisation has to be shown throughout the story – from the beginning till the end. The way the story is we have created too much on ourselves and needs to be simplified. However the idea of having short little things in the story is very interesting and works well.
Dressing characters up in different costumes will take up a lot of time which we don’t have… as we only have a day to complete the whole film; by thinking around the characters situation it will be more realistic and practical. If it is not simplified there will be a lot of problems in the future when coming to production of the film; the best thing to do is think and sort out everything in pre-production so it is well planned out.
Make sure things are tone down so it works with what we got as it is not a good idea to have long scenes… quick scenes work better. Thinking about what you can actually do and not what you want to do. Need to stand back and see the negative things for ourselves (meaning things that could be an issue) as 5mins is all we got for the film. Do and add more research on the topics we will be using in our film. BE CREATIVE AND QUESTION YOUR IDEAS!!
Overall the story was much better than the old one and has a lot of potential with good adventurous ideas.
Miss Nair explain how there was too many character and we would need to think about how long it would take to film all of them; as adding a lot of character in a short film could complicate things. It could be very difficult to try to organise all the characters.
The story needs to have a lot of thinking behind it… about the location and timing with the characters. The organisation has to be shown throughout the story – from the beginning till the end. The way the story is we have created too much on ourselves and needs to be simplified. However the idea of having short little things in the story is very interesting and works well.
Dressing characters up in different costumes will take up a lot of time which we don’t have… as we only have a day to complete the whole film; by thinking around the characters situation it will be more realistic and practical. If it is not simplified there will be a lot of problems in the future when coming to production of the film; the best thing to do is think and sort out everything in pre-production so it is well planned out.
Make sure things are tone down so it works with what we got as it is not a good idea to have long scenes… quick scenes work better. Thinking about what you can actually do and not what you want to do. Need to stand back and see the negative things for ourselves (meaning things that could be an issue) as 5mins is all we got for the film. Do and add more research on the topics we will be using in our film. BE CREATIVE AND QUESTION YOUR IDEAS!!
Overall the story was much better than the old one and has a lot of potential with good adventurous ideas.
Monday 11 October 2010
Feedback on Treatment
Comments from Miss. Nair on the treatment for The Adventures Of Dan and Alfie;
- hasn't been padded out - shocking to just lead to the mum leaving?
- don't have the software for the animation ideas you have
- the story needs to be stronger
- expecting more from us - something else
- depth is missing to the story
- creativeness is not flowed
- not grabbing
- need to improve the second half of the story!
- there has to be a BIG MOMENT keep the same story but play around with the order
- story isn't convincing as the mother would not leave her son with an alcoholic father
- it's twisted
- something go wrong when the mother leaves?
- end differently maybe?
*** instead of having the mother walking out have something going on behind the scenes. (Father abusing the mother) Make the mother the victim.
- the initial idea is good but the second half of the story doesn't fit.
- either work on it or start afresh
- think about how it can end
- you have a beginning now you need a middle and an end to make this story have layers and depth.
- hasn't been padded out - shocking to just lead to the mum leaving?
- don't have the software for the animation ideas you have
- the story needs to be stronger
- expecting more from us - something else
- depth is missing to the story
- creativeness is not flowed
- not grabbing
- need to improve the second half of the story!
- there has to be a BIG MOMENT keep the same story but play around with the order
- story isn't convincing as the mother would not leave her son with an alcoholic father
- it's twisted
- something go wrong when the mother leaves?
- end differently maybe?
*** instead of having the mother walking out have something going on behind the scenes. (Father abusing the mother) Make the mother the victim.
- the initial idea is good but the second half of the story doesn't fit.
- either work on it or start afresh
- think about how it can end
- you have a beginning now you need a middle and an end to make this story have layers and depth.
Friday 8 October 2010
story idea 3 redarfted
The Adventures of Dan And Alfie! The Attack Of Kryptonite Karly
Our first draft of this story contained the same storyline as the one now but using what we've learned from watching the other short films, we have constructed richer characters with a back story, believable plot points that are minimal to keep it simple and still kept our superman twist in our theme.
Treatment:
Like most young boys Alfie always saw his Dad(Dan) as his hero. Doing most father duties his Dad was his idol. They played football together, ate ice cream together and he taught Alfie how to ride a bike. Being his Dad's sidekick was all he ever wanted. But the adventures were always cut short by Mummy(Karly) putting little Alfie to bed.
Meanwhile . . . What Alfie did not know, Daddies hidden addiction to Kryptonite was much stronger than his love for his family; but even after 5 long, yet strenuous, years mummy couldn't take it anymore. Karly leaves Dan and Alfie behind, believing they will live a happier life full of adventures without her, and hopes Dan will change his ways now he has to look after his son. But once she walks out and Alfie grows older, one drunken night after another, Daddy's super hero qualities soon fade and Alfie sees him for the villain he really is.
In addition to these changes, we changed the names to make the characters younger. We decided Karly would have more motivation to leave her family if she had been sucked into it from a young age. Giving her the back story that her and Dan fell in love young and had Alfie early on in life. So for the majority of her 20s she was stuck in a dead end family routine that she didn't want. Not to mention Dans growing alcohol addiction to drive her away more.
Our first draft of this story contained the same storyline as the one now but using what we've learned from watching the other short films, we have constructed richer characters with a back story, believable plot points that are minimal to keep it simple and still kept our superman twist in our theme.
Treatment:
Like most young boys Alfie always saw his Dad(Dan) as his hero. Doing most father duties his Dad was his idol. They played football together, ate ice cream together and he taught Alfie how to ride a bike. Being his Dad's sidekick was all he ever wanted. But the adventures were always cut short by Mummy(Karly) putting little Alfie to bed.
Meanwhile . . . What Alfie did not know, Daddies hidden addiction to Kryptonite was much stronger than his love for his family; but even after 5 long, yet strenuous, years mummy couldn't take it anymore. Karly leaves Dan and Alfie behind, believing they will live a happier life full of adventures without her, and hopes Dan will change his ways now he has to look after his son. But once she walks out and Alfie grows older, one drunken night after another, Daddy's super hero qualities soon fade and Alfie sees him for the villain he really is.
In addition to these changes, we changed the names to make the characters younger. We decided Karly would have more motivation to leave her family if she had been sucked into it from a young age. Giving her the back story that her and Dan fell in love young and had Alfie early on in life. So for the majority of her 20s she was stuck in a dead end family routine that she didn't want. Not to mention Dans growing alcohol addiction to drive her away more.
Treatment
Story idea 2...
When your gone
Tagline:Does true love truly die?
Steve returns home from a hard day at work hoping to see his wife and daughter waiting for him at the front door, reality sets in and realises that his wife and son past away a month ago. Every night he would cook a meal and set out a table for three, his lack of consciousness and refusal of acceptance would lead him to living in an alternative reality.
When your gone
Tagline:Does true love truly die?
Steve returns home from a hard day at work hoping to see his wife and daughter waiting for him at the front door, reality sets in and realises that his wife and son past away a month ago. Every night he would cook a meal and set out a table for three, his lack of consciousness and refusal of acceptance would lead him to living in an alternative reality.
Wednesday 6 October 2010
story idea 3
Treatment: Like most young boys Alfie always saw his Dad as his hero. Doing most father duties his Dad was his idol. They played football together, ate ice cream together and he taught Alfie how to ride a bike. Being his Dad's sidekick was all he ever wanted. But the adventures were always cut short by Mummy(Kathy) putting little Alfie to bed.
MEANWHILE...
Daddies hidden addiction to Kryptonite was much stronger than his love for his family; and mummy couldnt take it anymore.Once she walks out Daddy's super hero qualites fade and Alfie sees him for the villian he really is.
MEANWHILE...
Daddies hidden addiction to Kryptonite was much stronger than his love for his family; and mummy couldnt take it anymore.Once she walks out Daddy's super hero qualites fade and Alfie sees him for the villian he really is.
Monday 4 October 2010
Treatment
Story Idea 1...
The Guy
19 year old, David O'Donnel, a series killer, who became mential distrubed after his mother death from a shotting two years ago. He believe that it was a mistake and that they got the wrong person; he felt that i wasnt fair that the person was meant to die was still alive when his mother wasn't; so he started killing young girls with light brown striaght hair(the same hair type as his mother).
After killing three innocent girls, he later on he comes across a young girl called Anges with the same hair type. he befriends her tricking her to thinking she was safe around, not knowing what he had done to the other girls. One day he follows her as walks out of school to go home. she becomes aware someone is following her and starts running, he goes after her.
They meet up when you can't run no more and he strangles her to death and cuts off her hair, leaving her died on the ground.
The Guy
19 year old, David O'Donnel, a series killer, who became mential distrubed after his mother death from a shotting two years ago. He believe that it was a mistake and that they got the wrong person; he felt that i wasnt fair that the person was meant to die was still alive when his mother wasn't; so he started killing young girls with light brown striaght hair(the same hair type as his mother).
After killing three innocent girls, he later on he comes across a young girl called Anges with the same hair type. he befriends her tricking her to thinking she was safe around, not knowing what he had done to the other girls. One day he follows her as walks out of school to go home. she becomes aware someone is following her and starts running, he goes after her.
They meet up when you can't run no more and he strangles her to death and cuts off her hair, leaving her died on the ground.
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